WALT self-check our stories using a rubric

Here is the recount I wrote on monday

On Monday the 13th Room 7 played a

game called The Mystery Box. In the game someone has to put an object in a box. Then blindfold someone. After you blindfold the the person so the person cannot see he has to feel the object and try and guess it.

When it was my turn they put a random object in the box. My first guess was a was a teddy bear and I got it right.

I knew it because it felt fluffy,hard button eyes,cuddly and the tail felt like a bunny’s tail.

My edited recount

Did I remember to include….
✓	Title
✓	Introduction
✓	Who, what, when, where, why, who, how
✓	3 paragraphs - burger model
✓	Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
✓	Specific adjectives
✓	Simile/Metaphor
✓	Different punctuation
✓	Short sentence for effect
✓	Correct spelling throughout the story
✓	A sentence you have added in editing
✓	A sentence you have moved in editing
✓	Sentence starters given

Mystery box

On Monday the 13th Room 7 played a game called The Mystery Box.

In the game someone has to put an object in a box. Then blindfold someone. After you blindfold the the person so the person cannot see he has to feel the object and try and guess it.The mystery box is made out of coca cola box.

When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on me , it felt like I was space. I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt a hand.!Yuck! My first guess was a teddy bear and I got it right.

I knew it because it felt fluffy as a bunny,hard button eyes,cuddly and the tail felt like a bunny’s tail.

I thought this game was good to write for a recount because it was fun and cool.